Luckytime's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[GraveRobbing]

The texture quality is insane, did you use a brush preset by any chance?

[CM - RavenCrafte]

I love your art, it's always so clean. I appreciate how much care you put into it.

[Red Knight]

Your other art is really good, and even this drawing shows a strong understanding of lighting and form. But I think you're susceptible to making shortsighted design choices. The way the hands are lit is less-than-ideal, the composition is questionable and the lightning looks rushed. That said, there are parts about it I really like, like the top of the helmet which I think was well done.

Mancartti responds:

Thank you for your critique. You are 100% correct in your assessment and I will try to make better design choices going forward. As for composition, calling any of my compositions questionable would be an understatement. As well I will try to take better care to plan out and execute lighting properly. Again, thank you for your critique, I appreciate your insight.

[Ferry]

Wonderful!

[Bringer of Storms]

Good art... yes.

[Buen Provecho]

The emblem, sword and logo are cool, everything else could use some work. Good luck in the competition.

Edit: Sure, the texture you applied to the pizza slice looks flat, which CAN work in some instances where the aesthetic is stylized... but not here since you already established that things are detailed in this "world". Specifically the 3 things I praised originally, they're all more polished than the pizza and the girl. Generally, the subject is supposed to be greater than or equal to the supporting material in terms of detail. So while you clearly put a lot of effort into that shark, it actually made the whole picture worse overall because it created an imbalance.

Then there's other things like the anatomy (which I almost always harp on), the general shape of the pizza isn't that pleasing to look at and there's rough edges in a few places. The pose actually isn't that bad, but like someone else said: the line art is better in some ways. For example, I didn't know she was holding a pizza cutter until I looked at the line art. In that respect, you failed to communicate that she was holding a pizza cutter. The line art also looks better because without the logo fighting for attention, it's easier to focus on what the picture is really about. There's a nice flow in the lines that's completely missing in the final piece, and that's not a uncommon problem in the art world.

FuShark responds:

Thank you so much for the revision. Gives me a whole lot to think about!

1. I'm trying to understand what you consider "detail" and "polish". I agree that the texture work on the pizza could be improved but I'm not sure how that relates to the girl.

2. What's wrong with the anatomy?

3. I could have come up with something with a stronger emphasis on the pizza sure. I thought the curves I came up with complimented the pose well but I guess not.

4. The pizza cutter was a concern. It doesn't immediately read but I felt there were enough context clues that would guide people there. The emblem was a last minute addition and definitely took away from that.

5. I didn't add the logo during the sketch phase but it was always intended to be there. The idea there was that I was worried that there would be an imbalance with the negative space left in that top right corner.

If you'd like to continue this through messages that would be great! I know it's a pain to just keep revising comments and I really appreciate you taking the time to do this.

[Back to back against the world]

Took me by surprise, very nice work.

[AnimeCat]

The drawings could use some work but the animation is Disney-level. Good job.

[Veneficus Messis]

Magnificent work!

[Mario Tribute]

Bowser looks awesome and intimidating, the other characters look a bit too anime. Very nice work overall.